I am a Year 6 student at Yaldhurst Model School and I live on the outskirts of Christchurch in New Zealand, I am in Rimu class. My teacher is Miss Blair
I really enjoyed learning about your cat Billie. You used metaphors successfully to describe your cat in detail. Is there a pattern for the use of the word ‘she’? Could you make this more purposeful?
Kia Ora Violet, I'm Sam, a year 6 at South Hornby School. I love the way you described Ballet because it really put an image in my head. Next time use capital letters at the begin of your sentences. Do you do ballet? I did it for a term.
Ata Marie Violet, I am a student from South Hornby School. I really enjoyed the metaphors because they all are in the correct places. I also like how your poems went together. I have a pet puppy and her name is Bella. My Feedforward for you is maybe you shouldn’t put your full name on the first slide because other people will be able to identify you. Tena - Koutou Tena - Koutou Tena - Koutou Katoa.
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'The whispers of happiness
ReplyDeleteDance inside the mind'
I really enjoyed learning about your cat Billie. You used metaphors successfully to describe your cat in detail. Is there a pattern for the use of the word ‘she’? Could you make this more purposeful?
ReplyDeleteno but it is my fav pet and I have a lot of pets
DeleteKia Ora Violet, I'm Sam, a year 6 at South Hornby School.
ReplyDeleteI love the way you described Ballet because it really put an image in my head.
Next time use capital letters at the begin of your sentences.
Do you do ballet? I did it for a term.
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ReplyDeleteAta Marie Violet, I am a student from South Hornby School. I really enjoyed the metaphors because they all are in the correct places. I also like how your poems went together. I have a pet puppy and her name is Bella. My Feedforward for you is maybe you shouldn’t put your full name on the first slide because other people will be able to identify you. Tena - Koutou Tena - Koutou Tena - Koutou Katoa.
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